you know what? that was pretty decent. Keep at it, with a bit of polish on your comedic timing and some practice with the joke writing you have something here.
Double down on the physical comedy gags, those were the strongest part of this thing!
you know what? that was pretty decent. Keep at it, with a bit of polish on your comedic timing and some practice with the joke writing you have something here.
Double down on the physical comedy gags, those were the strongest part of this thing!
I was definitely trying to practice physical and visual gags for this one. I'll work on timing and writing. Thanks for the feedback! Glad you liked it!
The way you over-animate this gives the whole thing a bit of a bad vibe. Feels more amateurish than it has to. Tone down the wobbling a bit, people don't flail quite that hard even in cartoons. I know it's meant as a sort of compensation for using puppet animations, but you're overdoing it!
this is like a fever dream, but in a bad way. Your vocals are really not good man, you seriously need to put some practice in
major improvement in sfx and pacing here. good work!
pretty in line with the spirit of joyful, though I gotta say some of the va work in this wasn't the best. Skull dude especially, but buddy sounded a bit flat too
hahaha, that was really Charming! I'd say tighten your linework, but honestly the wibbly lines only added to the charm!
Thank you! You got it buddy I will tighten my lineworks I agree.
Pretty good! I think you need to work on your foley and storyboarding a bit though, the lack of any sound for him typing on his big computer or the sudden unexplained jump to the blueprint style there took some points off for me.
Apart from that, the voiceacting had some rhythm issues, but I'm not versed enough on acting to really critique that beyond "Some parts, like his moral flip-flop felt sudden and off."
Promising start, though! Looking forward to more!
God that was dark, fucking perfect
Now That's What I Call Edgy!
I can't judge this poorly though, it got a genuine belly laugh out of me which is rare these days with this kind of content
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